I thaught it was str8 dawg. ur structure did kinda fall off just a lil by the 2nd verse. ur vocab was good but I felt u tried too hard. please state if this is a poem or a rap verse. cuz its got the feelings in word but I cant get the emotion from the flow. try to add more of that into the flow. but it was still a nice piece with good vocab and a clear meaning to wat its about. I give u a 6.9/ 10.

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