umm I dont know. seems like you were just trying to rhyme and shit, using big words dont make ya lines hot man. which is why I always say keep it simple if you have to. its better to be simple and ill than try to be complex and come out boring, feel me??

I dunno. i saw potential.. but keep at it.

"It masks obstacles, seems life's journeys not worth it.
We're nervous, on the surface we're smilyn,
with interior dissatisfaction on the insides were dyin.
We're trying, to get solutions to all our problems.
Generations to ponder but we still can't solve them."

^fav section

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