Nah I Dissagree With You Crit, I Didnt Like This Peice. No Hate Rex But It Jus Was'nt Complex Enuff For My Liken. Try Picking A Solid Subject, Something You Could Really Go To Work On Nah Mean, This Type Of Issh Is Played As Hell.

Try Uppin Ya Vocab A Lil, Pick A Subject You Can Drop Good Emotion And Imagery On.

No Hate..Jus An Hounest Opinion Rex..

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