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Originally Posted by Critic
This was a nice verse ! very emotional,.. but the structure was
horrible,.. which made it hard to find the flow ! I didn't find it in
some places... You used some nice vocab at times but nothing
eye catching to entice my imagination, u didn't really paint an
image of what was going on.
You just need to up your complexity,...
Stay up
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i've rapped this to over 100 people....it flows perfect, i promise. and for some reason, everyone says "u didn't really paint an
image of what was going on." in everyones open mics. is imagery crucial for the success of the piece? not to me. i simply split it up thanking each of my parents, do you actually want some descriptive insight about how everything looked, what we were doing when i read it to them, blah blah blah? i've been rappin' since 18, i'm 21. there's not one area i need to work on. how about feed on multis? metas? similes? thanks.
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