ok to be honest, this rook-basic. very simple rhymin'. so after the 4th line, i just skimmed through. then i read your last line "this shits easy, 'cause i'm greasy"....? that's an obvious filler and attempt to just "rhyme" without any real reason of why "this shits easy". Don't do that. one thing i learned that's been the most helpful is to make EVERY line count. don't write 16 lines with only 8 good ones. work on vocab. multis. wordplay. metas. and flow. this verse was barbershop, real choppy. also from what i've seen, this site has some actually pretty good tutorials form everything i just said. wanna get better? observe some elite heads here......and do the tutorials. - A Skyll.

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