Banned: Biting
From: Myrtle Beach, SC originally from South Jerzee/Philly, PA |
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IP:
The story was cool, it had a twist and I like that.
This was my favorite part...
Eduction and a bright future, always voted most likely to succeed
Heart of a champ, even had the will to teach a blind kid to read/
This was my least favorite part...
She took part in an abusive marriage, where she learned how to grip the nine
Killed a man and her life was ruined, like glued murders she sticked[should be stuck] to crime/
You used "sticked" to force the multi. Forced multi's = not good.
Overall it was aight. Keep writin'.
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