Thread: For my Girl.
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Old 06-08-06, 07:32 PM   #13
Passivist
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meh, idk. Played out, really played out. I hate saying that but at some points it is very true. Your lines were stretched as fuck, it took me a while to read the lines. Though you had many flaws, the emotion kind of filled in for them even though it wasnt as in depth as I thought it was going to be. I think you could've added more vocab IMO, because I felt you were too simplistic with your rhymes and your feelings/emotions. Thats just my thought, sorry man.
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