your intro seems a lil overbarring...haha you stutter its cool...just turn ya voice down a lil....when the beat hits you start to get a lil more into it.....good open into it....ive gotten waisted away lot....this songs about me isnt it....good lookin....haha, the hook is good, catchy....i like it......maybe an effect on the last down for the hook...an echo or something would be enthraling....you got alotta spit in ya flow, smoke much? haha, hmm another suicide track....eh not bad, creeped up on me, didnt think it needed to go that far....an unnecessary murder might of been more realistic. then jail....i dunno coulda ended the story diff...but goood track none the less. good production, good lyrics....its a nice track....

RTF man - http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=230479

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