Not bad, this is probably top 3 for my fav's from you. Your lyrics were hot man, flow was pretty good as well. A little shaky on some lines but it's not that noticable. Your delivery could use more power, having more power with a non american accent would be a mad good thing. It'd show that you believe in yaself, I suggest you trying to do a song on a real gangsta beat, but try and get somin off soundclick. I don't really mean gangsta beat but somin bangin you know. But uh also I think if you found a way to say your rhymes better like how you end the line with the rhyme, it'd be nice if you said the rhyme better cuz sometimes I don't catch it cuz you outta breath or something. but overall not bad, keep it up man.

rtf here: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=230629

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