hes right on the production side, you need to learn to EQ ur vocals better, get them abit cleaner, it actually sounds like ur mic isnt that good either though either that or u didnt do enough reduction on the background noise.

flow is cool, abit predictable at times but good n consistant, jus varie it abit more, its your delivery i dont like, its very boring, lacks charisma, its decent though, keep workin.