Black Poet
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IP:
Voted For: ...D.P...
Rob wins this battle for me,.
Cas I wasn't feeling the opening bars:*************
A windy day wit no sign of no one near my way
When I got a call from a girl that lived by my place
And all she said was come quick I maybe a horny bitch
So I went to the store and got me some condoms really quick
I call back the bitch to come back to my crib
Made the lights dim as soon as she came in
Clothes soon hittin the floor, all torned and ripped
Had her on her back, about to stick it in
Got the condom put it on, and then the moment really begins
All slippery, wet, body temperature climate risin quick
Felt so good, the movement of her grindin on it
Before the end she gave me head real quick
But in the moment I took off the rubber I had on my dick
Sensational tingle as I came in her quick and
That’s when the problems really had began
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I like when you twisted it 5 years later but it all become
far to predictable for me. I like the meaning of your verse
but sum bits were poorly written.:************
For weeks I felt the same, so I went to the doctor and all I can do is wait
An hour has passed in the clinic my turn to go so I got up and went in
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I feel you could have made this a whole lot better u just
seem to overcomplicate.
But this was dope,..
Now thinking: can’t be no lower, can’t see no higher
Cuz I can’t raise and conceive a child can’t have what was my “Deepest Desire”
****Topicals need to had flow, u still have to count
syllables for decent flow.
I felt your vocab could be up-ed didn't see anything dope
but it was a good drop.
Rob:
I like the way u write we have the same style 4 lines
try adding inners for better flow, it would boost complexity.
Vocab was nice, can be up-ed,. flow nice, was pretty easy
to read.. didnt give me a picture of what was going on in my
head but I understand the whole concept.
This was a good battle but Robs verse was just better every
thing was on pont dope drop fam.
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