yo defitnly not bad wit u being kinda new (most of the time new means new ta rap)
and this being a o.m i was kinda assuming it'll just be another wack o.m like usual
but freal this wasnt what i expected....u DEFITNLY have storytelling
ur storytelling is best...ur flow is ight it had some rhythm dunno if it'll go to a beat or not..maybe....for it being lyrical it got kinda basic but it kinda hard being lyrical when u plotting out a story while u keep it rhyming so yea no sweat there

overall this was decent..i'd give it a 7/10 keep it up young one and u might build urself a reputation (hopefully beyond a website)