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Old 07-13-06, 11:57 PM   #11
I Am Unreal.
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First good piece I have seen in Open Mic. Flowed smoothly from both. Excellent structure. Really nice read with some decent metas. I thought it was really abstract... more story telling needs to go into it...... also i thought you could have done a better job linking each other's verses..... But nonetheless, a really nice and smooth read from a couple of talented writers. See you next week in PT .

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=231636
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