this was better than ur other my man.

and i got the whole recording thing mixed up sry about that lol.

uhh you had good points and showed ur struggle...good emotion deff. felt that. work on ya spelling a bit...good chorus idea....a bit more complex and imaginitive then ur other....flow still a bit wobbily other than that pretty good.

hit me back with some feed on mine..peaec

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