i liked it no matter what these other people think

right about now, multis are overrated and the way this came was so much more natural to me than that.

you have a classic idealist viewpoint and i like it.

your style is basic but spiced up enough to pull interest.

this was relevent, brought me to the scene, and refreshing to me.

keep it up.

my only "constructive" criticism is to MAKE people feel. bring more imagery via concrete verbs. even when the characters/ideas/scenes are meant to be still keep things in a state of motion. otherwise, you did damn good.

dopeness