honestly this was a very solid representation of skill.

by far, you are the most skilled, competent, and believable writer i've seen here so far.

i liked the poem that put you into the song before you got to it. it intrigued me because i thought that was a novel way to begin a meaningful post.

the way you have the text structured helps my eyes because the traditional chunk method can be weary at times.

you brought out so much, made considerable points, and even incited a quotable:

Oh, brothers and sisters, I plead you to hear
Of the incise of a nation born of deceiver’s fear
So heinous in its methods, constructed invisible
Political puppetry, our division unpreventable

A scheme devised of lies intent on separation
Creeps between our shores spreading its segregation
Constructed by wealth and greed, desire of control
If we choose not to stand, it costs us a most devastating toll

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these bars lead into the high points of the piece, building momentum until the final burst.

dopeness

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