Originally Posted by Wordz Ahgod

I wont get deep into coz Im tired but like it. Its got good emotion and you stick well to concept and feelings. you just need to be more creative with whats going on. you really speed through it in each lines so theres always something new going on. drop a line on like the setting or something. make like a story and try to get the readers really into it and it'll be hot. 1