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Old 07-31-06, 04:12 PM   #6
~Test~
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Wow My first match and im already shittin on this nigga Like a diaper
You didnt know that I rip Jae's Just ask marv his casket in the cypher
wtf no.
Im so sick that when I spit I burn my top lip Like a can of Raid
dissin nigga's is not in my resume so im gonna go on record and say
...were is the punch
Fuck you!.....I hope you know that aint a Diss its jus a modern fact
Because its like im your "safebelt" the way I just "set you Back"
no
I Straight crush "J Blockz" Like I was playing a easy game of Yotzi
Burnin This bitch Like a Jew With Chlymedia and im The fuckin Natzi
wtf?
I broke up in Your house and straight did ya girl...yeah she a slut
I shot at Jay so much nigga's thought I was giving the "Directors Cut"
ok needed way better wording


vs.


Why Think Ya Flow'll-See-Mines? Try Your Best, And When It's Over,-Retry
I'll 'Break Ya Collarbone', N Make Ya "Shoulder Lean" Like "Young Dro-N-T.I"
no
Easily Sonnin-This-Dude, N 'Take Ya Breath', When Ya 'Lungs-Get-Removed'
You'll Get Laid Out, Then "Picked Up N Popped" Like A "Gun-When-It's-Used"
no
Send Ya Fate-Devastation, 'Blow Ya Head In Tha Air, Call It 'Face-Elevation'
'Sign Ups To Be Sick', U Must Was Like "Kanye West" N Had A "Late-Registration"
no
I Found Out What Ya Safe-Is-Worth, Sent Some Niggas To Let Tha 8's-Disperse
And Now, I Got You "Rushin To Leave Your House" Like You "Late-For-Work"
no
I'm Through-Bombin-This-Faggot-Mean, I'll Sit Cool,-Watchin-This-Faggot-Scream
Tried To Be In Da Game, But I "Snatched You Out" Like "Coupons-In-A-Magazine"
and no



overall-this was a extremly weak battle both needed better wording oz all ur punchs were like just no and ur last one was barly ok u need to work on ur wording and concepting ur punchlines J wtf take all the "" and the--- out of ur verses and work on ur concept building and ur wording both came really weak imo

vote///oz
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