Within Eternity's Wither
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Uhhmmm....the wording could really be better and honestly so could the emotion i wasn't really feeling it, vocabulary was basic structure and syllable count could really use some working on also, plus the imagry was so so, other then that you did ok not very fond of this piece but you kept to the topic at least, keep trying you'll get better in time
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