oh yea?
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not bad, some simple lines in there and the concept has sort of been done before, but still. it wasnt bad, flowed well at times and shit, kept it simple, which isnt a bad thing always.. only prob was I felt you could have used a more complicated rhyme scheme, the one you used was too simple and made this a boring read. but keep dropping man.
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