Now, let me educate you all. I am trying to help niggaz elevate and shit.

This may come across as long, but I'm only trying to help. So take the time and read it, word.


- Forced Structure
Let me just say that both of you still have it. Mystic has loosened his up a bit, but it is still forced in my eyes, and Oz. is using it like crazy. I know it may be a style you are used to, but you got to switch it up. Honestly, nobody is feeling that shit anymore. Don't be worried about people complaining about your shit because lines are all over the place. Basically, write your punch and then read it through. If it flows well then it will work. Do not cut and chop at it so that it is perfectly structured because more often than not you will make the flow seem choppy.

- Forced Wordplay
Both of you did this. I'm going to be straight, if you are forcing your shit then it is gay. Plain and simple. You can not be putting speechmarks or apostrophes or anything around your shit to emphasise it. A voter should not have to be forcefully shown the wordplay, they should be able to recognise it without being shown. That is the true sign of dope wordplay. So, drop the speechmarks/apostrophes shit.

- Played Concepts
Right, you should basically know the majority of mad played concepts like MJ lines, and sick lines, hot lines... etc, etc. The reason I am addressing this is mainly because of Oz. You used a "like" line which is fucking gay as fuck now. If you ever write a line and realise that it will only work by saying "blah blah blah, like a blah blah blah" you get the idea... if you have to use the word like in that context, then fucking drop the punch from your verse.

- Relevant Setups
Aight, this is aimed at both. You both dropped punches that did not have relevant setups at all. Now, this can be gotten around. If you can not come up with a relevant setup, then drop something like..

"I'm bashing through, with knives and bats to splatter.."

.. as your setup. Do not try and throw a diss in each line because it is fucking gay and herb like. The 2nd line is the punchline, NOT the first line. If you can get a relevant setup to the punch then you are smoking. Even if it is only the slightest thing, like if you were dropping a homeless punch (my specialty) you need only call the dude a "hobo" or something in the setup and it would work.

EXAMPLE:
You fucking hobo.. I come thick with the grind..
So next time ya wanna kickbox with me, I suggest leavin' ya homes behind.

^ That is just a quick example, not the best. But it still comes off better than..

This kid is bullshit, he gets torn so much he could topple a porn stars clout
And fuck, if you wanna kickbox with me, don't fucking bring your house.

^ Dissing in both bars, it is gay... and the 1st line just doesn't work with the second, feel me.


Those are some of the basics you both should work on. If you need any further help with personals, punches, flipping shit... then hit me with a pm dropping your AIM or MSN details and I'll school you on some elevated shit. Nah'mean!!