ok 2 things. 1- this should be in freestyle not in open mics. and 2- some of the words didnt rhyme....
u could have used some multies and some rhymes were forced.... really aint no story behind this.... didnt really get my attention either..... no hate. but ive seen some of ur shit, and its been better. keep trying kid......

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