After reading it a few times this is what i've come up with:

I am really shit at explaining my thoughts, so bear with me. Your skill with words is fine, I liked the way you chose your words and techniques (like that dope simile in 2nd last line). This is the part thats hard to explain... hmmm... The vibe I got from your poem was somewhat loose. Loose as in like, spread out, not physically but some other way. And to make it better you need to sort of bring your shit all together, condense it, so not a single word is wasted.

That makes absolutely no sense, but its the best I could explain it. lmao.

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