Thread: Come Back
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Old 08-07-06, 03:54 AM   #4
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Baby come back, i just need you right next to me
Baby come back, my mind grips, your lips it's sexy
Baby come back, i just want another chance
Baby come back to me, for one more dance

see each girl has a mind but yours move me
when you kiss me and hug me in school see,
i've bin with other chicks but none like you
and never found the one, the one quite true
on the fone til late, silence d by you laughter
sometimes argued but always made up after
talking about thing i want to do to you mama
and the way you giggled when calling me papa
i feel like malino with a one more chance song
cause the bond we shared made love so strong

Baby come back, i just need you right next to me
Baby come back, my mind grips, your lips it's sexy
Baby come back, i just want another chance
Baby come back to me, for one more dance


this was kinda played off the topic buit this was nice i liked the writing and choice of diction and wordings my dude!...nice metas and ish man
keep writing i see potential but work on complexity you came a little simple in this but nice overall!
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