this was all over the place, had some decent ideas, but you didnt really say anything new, for a first drop ever I say it wasnt bad, but really it wasnt good, and I can tell your new to this stuff, just keep at it, this first drop is better than most peoples first drops, so thats a place, just keep doing you, oh and try not to mispell words in ya verses it makes reading it annoying to most people and try being more creative

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