^lol man, Open mic forum here is dead. But i'll drop some feed...

aiight this was pretty tight. I think it'd be much more doper tho if it was audio wise. Cuz the multi's in this are crazy. And flow is fluid all throughout, so just those would of made it an enjoyable read. I thought it was ill how you compared like each piece to what it was like. pretty dope. had some ill metaphors and shit. Real good shit yo. Especially since I love playing chess. dad taught me when I was 5. entered couple of tournaments and shit. Shit's fun, and good strategy and shit. But since I play too i could understand most of the shit you said and enjoyed it more. good shit.

some lines that stood out:
in the record its said, we’re misled and treacherous heads
cause fact is that as kids we learned to play checkers instead
haha this was tight. especially since it's pretty true also. made me chuckle

there’s no fleeing they’re told, but some hold on deep in their souls
cause of rags to riches stories with pawns reaching their goals
like this shit, like how Pawns like weakest pieces hence the rags, and their goal is reaching the other side where they can become a Queen hence the riches. good shit
at night there’s knights.., the drug addicts, terrorists and felons, see
they’re known for L‘s, whether it’s a blunt, suicide or felony
another dope one. People who aren't familiar wouldn't understand L part. but I thought this was nice way to describe knight

but word this was dope read. keep it up yo. one...

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