Aiight here goes...

This was a good piece that was enjoyable to read......your flow and line of length was good so it was easy to read right the way through.....your rhymescheme was good it rhymed nicely.....Vocabulary was good but i felt more complex words could have been used to make the piece more complexed.....there was some imagery which was aiight and your emotion was ok also....Overall decent piece right here no major things wrong so keep up and good job.