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Old 08-17-06, 04:36 PM   #8
DaTrusHurtz
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Played wordplay and forced wording, so itll be easy to beat him
but ur punches are a highlight,
......... only cuz without em we couldnt read em
idea for the personal was good, but I felt ya coulda worded this a bit better

You aint no gangsta <---------really it’s true, no one even likes you
^Ya u can TAKE shots – but that’s enough – ur already drunk dude
a quick tip, adding multies improves flow.. so if you had something that rhymed with drunk instead of likes in your setup, the flow is improved. Anyway, this was kinda played, seen a lot of shots lines before and saying he's drunk isn't much of a diss

This win will be my first here, hell nah I don’t need any luck
This wont be over until the fat lady sings…
…And were still waiting for his girl to show up
okay, but a bit too basic. Try bein' a little more creative

We know he's really a fan, and no one thinks that this dude be sick
U needa get off my dick, u bring new meanin to a GroupE bitch
A couple groupie lines were used week 1 so this is played by now but okay

Pretty close battle here, but I think Fux's opener gives him the edge here. Wyte, keep at it, just try bein' a little more creative next week and try to think of concepts which are less likely to have been done before.

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