Listening trough my usual shit.

I don't understand what a "betrayed metaphor" is. the hook is ehh, i liked them message, just not the packaging. shoulda def recorded another about 2 layers under the hook so it stood out more. your qual is okay, could def take it to a whole new level if you EQ'd your stuff differently. First verse tells a story, so we'll see ho good it is when the story is over. second verse was nice pulled things together cleared up the meta, though differnet word use could have made the track more visual and immersive, felt liek i was listening to someone tell me facts off a list instead of telling me a story i was experiencing in my mind ya dig?

its an okay track. not bad, but didn't floor me either.

uno

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