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Old 09-02-06, 02:44 PM   #11
DaTrusHurtz
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kid, i'm rich 'n in the news, while this guys a jerk
so i'll keep makin paper, boy.. thats just ur line of work
paperboy concept was dope.. i was hoping for a video game reference, but the way ya used it was good too

look - if you keep spittin trash like that you gonn' stay behind the rear..
You gonn' need atleast three fax machines to get that paper-line to clear..
nice feed here, i really liked this a lot, but try makin' ur wording more angry... by simply adding the word faggot, bitch, or whatev, you can make lines a lot better
I kno you embarrased witcha chick more than often..
..When she opens wide to gargle - but the bitch jus ends up flossin..
not dope, but I thought this was decent too

i'm the truth in the booth, so i spit facts just for my health
but u need a fax machine.. cause u cant process them yaself
better wording coulda improved this, but good feed once again

Pretty decent battle right here, y'all got the right idea on what a proper feed is. I could see it going either way, but the opener from Untold was my favorite line so I got him winnin' this. Good effort from Eddie though.

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