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alright some crazy imagery in this........which didnt make much sense. dont fall into the trap of using as many rhyming words as possible for the sake of having multis in your rhymes. if there was a philosophical point to this piece, and i presume there was, i didnt get it. dont make rhymes which are too complex for anyone too understand or no-one will appriciate it.

but on the upside you're one of the few guys i've seen on here in a while who has potential. keep elavating.