this wasn't bad....but not great.

on the plus side you did have some lines that were real. that i thought, dam i know what he means here....

i felt where you were coming from....


i think you needed to make your shit a little more complex maybe with inner bar rhyme schemes or by using long syllable rhymes, cause at the minute it is a very basic flow.

your verse also lacked cohesion, you topic switched too much, one minute you were talking about your parents, then about being an emcee, then racism....it made it hard to folow, you need to pick a topic and stick with it.....


keep droppin