yo you need to loose the bars
and type your verses out like this.
makes it much easier to read
and the flow is felt more
also... you need to pick one topic
stick to that topic and get ya point across.
you got skills though kid
you could have some dope content
well... if you put your mind to it anyways
so yea.. elevate and ill be sure to peep ya next drop

some decent, yet scatter thoughts in this piece! like i said stick to a certain topic! nice simalies and such though..
elevate yo, keep droppin!