Whoa, I gotta say this... I really don't feel that as being a "freestyle". The vocabulary threw this thing off badly to me. The vocab was just too much for this. You had some tight lines in there though, such as...

Break backs and snap you like a pretzel when I get mental
As I get deeper into the frights from hell
I rise like the sun from east set west upon the third rail
Drawing within inner potential for this sentinel

I also think the bar length was a little long too. Nothing major to really improve on this though but to me it threw off the verse. Keep droppin.

pz