I thought the ending was strong and for a first time it was good.
But, i thought that it flowed inconsistently, and the first line was a bit of a mouthful - needs to be shortened.
The next few lines i didn't real feel, but after that you got it flowing and as i said, i think the last few lines came on strong and good.

Good first time and i didn't mean no beef.

Keep practising.

Peace