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Old 02-21-03, 10:50 AM   #3
DaGyrlRemarqabL
..A New Breed of Femcee..
 
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sup K-D..
This was a very powerful, even scary piece..

>I remember the days, when you were my one and only...
but now a days, even when I'm with you, I'm still lonely...

wshew..thats something I know no one would want to hear..a lot of the times its an inevitable statement tho.

>Thinking, what in the world is missing...
when, we haven't done a thing different...
But, for the some reason the love is gone...
I can't keep telling you I love you because I know it's wrong...

You easily put a lot of background information into this piece and also projected what you were feeling currently, which is a lot to do in such a short space, but you did it well....And I think this is what makes the ending so hard-hitting..Really grips your heart and makes you think.
I thought this was an ill piece.
Stay up n keep writing.
Peace n propz!
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