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"Thank You..."
IP:
I'll get to your topic right now dog..thanx for the feedback...
A couple of my bars had a weird structure to 'em, I didn't put the correct punctuation on them, so many of my bars may not have "rhymed"...heres the bars....
and its like its absurd/ cuz although he's devoted his time
he cant get his emotions to rhyme, or describe it in words//
then throws the paper away/... and goes to get another pen
and then once again he thinks of ways of makin it great//
attempts fail over and over again/ to say what he wants to say
its not the same on some other days when shit flows from the pen//
^^^Those are the lines I'm reffering to...
My rhyme structure, and now..the flow, may be alittle more obviouse, and easy to follow........
To The Heavens.....
P.E.A.C.E.
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