concise already knows what I think.

Lucid- Your mic presence needs work because your levels were everywhere and at times it was hard to hear what you were saying. Another thing work on is a more consistent flow, because your flow was uneven at spots(To many syllable/missing syllable).

Endovidual- Use a better rhyme scheme, that rhyme scheme you used for this beat was not all that great. Internal rhyming wouldn't hurt ether a long with some multi-syllable rhyming. Mic presence could use work as well as the delivery.

this track was alright I would think up a new hook and polish up a few spots



~when~