Damn, was going to press "reply to topic", but ended up pressing "buddy", so don't get freaked out if you get a message saying "Varentao has added you as a buddy" or something...(!!)..i've taken it off...

...so anyway, to the piece....

...it was a solid piece....i think it went off at times....i mean the topic was something quite a few people on here can relate to i think...but i felt at times it began to lack...just at times a bit blunt....maybe over elaborating..

...BUT...the raw imagery....just showing the intensity of what some of the emotions a 'writer' can go through...whilst going through the creative process....for me, bought it home...and overall, it was a quite well executed piece...

...i'd say it's very good for your first piece (or a rookie, as you call yourself)...actually, very very good....and well, bags of potential shown....with time and more writing....i can see those little things that make it only SLIGHTLY off at TIMES, so most of the time it was very good....but i was much worse as a 'rookie' than you are right now...

as i said, very good piece...liked it...respect...