Aiight Trip Marxx, I wanted ya and now I got ya, here we go

I'm new to the game,
But let me tell you something Trip Marxx, I'm on my way to fame//
Do us all a favor,
And just shut the fuck up, why? Because your my savior//
Just get yo shit and leave,
Why?you ask again, because your my biggest pet peeve//
Yo not gonna do what I say?,
Fine fuck. Ima tell you what I am gonna do though, just remember it's too fucking late to pray//
You kmow I used to think you were cool,
But then I got to thinking, how the fuck did you get through school?//
You told me that J.Lo was your obsession,
Man what the fuck was that?, cmon make a real confession//
You know you wish you could,
But hey thats ok, when you grow up, call me, and ill show you ta my hood//
Bitch, I thought I told you to call,
Oh well, it's no wonder why you got shot by a chick named paul// (shot when he went to my hood without calling me)
Now ya be out walkin and limpin,
While Ima cruisin around with the finest and pimpin//
Man I'm only halfway done,
Yet you already on your knees, shouting, "stop already, you won"//
Ima bout to give up on yo ass,
You can rhyme worth a damn, not while ima ova here rapping with class//
You say yo wanna fight, yet all you got is some mace,
Shit, that aint gonna do anything, not when I gotta gum to yo face//
I ditched the gun and hit you in yo cheek,
you bust out cryin, goddam yo weak//
I stand yo ass up and I be like "Aiight let's go to my crib"
You still bitchin "But it hurts" I busta back "Shutup or I'll do the same to yo rib"//
We get to my house I be like hey you wanna go smoke a fattie?,
You jump up "you talking bout my mamma again? ima go tell my daddy"//
You ran out and hitched a ride,
Came back two hours lata daddy by yo side//
He holding a broken saw,
He like "come ova here biatch" so I do and I stick him in his jaw//
Then I said "now get out of here bitch"
Cops found him dead two days later, face down in a ditch//
Damn man, this is the second time you be on yo knees shoutin i won,
It aint ova yet, Ima just starting to have some fun//
But its all ova for you little Cory,
because I just told you yo life story//

I don't know if yo guys consider that a verse, or if itz good, buts datz mine yo, spit back.