That's not bad but you live in Cali and she lives in Idaho... How did ya meet and how will ya even see each other or stay in contact?... This was more of a poem than an open mic piece but I'll critique it anyway. You spilled out a lot of emotion into this piece and I could feel it. Just it makes me think that it's some i-net crush or something by you saying she's in Idaho and you're in Cali. That kinda ruins it for me but it's still your life and shit. Do what you do.

pz