damm this was long...
That verse is too long, should have separted it at least... give the eyes rest...
Anyway... I thought this was nice... a bit boring at some parts but the rhymes and vocab were strong all the way through... shi had a nice flow too...
"sleep? fuck it i'mma chronic insomniac, stay awake at night thinkin of islamic bomb attacks~
dreamin only teleports me to land of demonic acts where i arrive just in time to see my body collapse~ "
As soon as I read these lines^ I decided to read the whole thing, very strong opening to your piece...

Peace Dawg