your Content is Fine dogg.... it juss doesnt sound like your trying to rap... you know what im saying.... even wit the mic you got.... you can make yourself sound pretty good... peep the tutorials on cool edit.... so you can get your mixing down... and as far as the rapping... you gotta put your heart into what your saying... Remember your lyrics... and when you go to lay them down in cool edit... spit them shits with Conviction..... you know.... for a first try..... believe it or not.... i've heard Worse... so... Keep on keepin on kiko... hold ya head... and keep at it...

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