damn i like this song whyd you use this beat : /
ok flow is off btu thats obvious not too bad for your first try make your lines shorter make sure you hit the snares thats the clappign noise if you listen
lyricallyy i didnt really listen cause of your flow to be honest
you should remember your lyrics cause its killing your presence and delivery
also you can record in 2 or 4 bar segments thatll help with your breat control
overall not too badd keep dropping
ill collab wiht you
rtf - http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=234545

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