Not bad man, here's the pros and cons...
Yo, let's see, the vocab u use is pretty strong, and you had a descent amont of good rhymes...
Your flow wasn't all that thought, it didn't have to much rhythm to it, at some points it did, but then it got a bit choppy, on and off, and your topic, while not played out, isn't anything new...
I mean this piece ain't too impressive... but it ain't bad at all...
You got skill man, I think so...

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