The Saviour
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IP:
^ Oh no doubt. You'll improve over the weeks most definitely. I'd rather have a person who shows every week and improves gradually, than someone who is dope right now and unreliable.
Some tips though:
Don't capitalise every word, it looks awful.
Stop using so many ...............'s, it looks awful also.
Stop stretching your wording so much, example:
Man You Crew dont run Deep Nigga Yall Niggas Is lame
If So I'll Take The Flame and Burn Yall Nigga's
.............................................Till You Be Yellin One Blood Like Game
Your crew don't run deep dude, all ya'll bitches are lame
I'll take the flame 'n burn ya...till you be yellin One Blood like The Game
Also, try and relate the setup to the punch. Like so:
Ima drop fire in this battle, be straight beating ya lame
^ I'll take those flames 'n burn ya...till you be yellin One Blood like The Game
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