Thread: Racism
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Old 03-02-03, 09:50 AM   #6
AJay
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You got your point across well, but the rhyming scheme needs work on, and some of the lines need to be lengthened before the rhyme, to make the flow better:

eg: "Plus there gonna be a war, an you gotta settle the score?,
You face bomb threats, search me all over, aint i a civilian, aint you got no regrets?,"
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