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Old 09-28-06, 03:11 PM   #22
Ryan Hughes
the real man of steel
 
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From: Jerzy
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Your talking is tough? Man its obviouse all that trash wak
I'll kick you in your spine hard...just to avoid a flashback

Vs

This is what wrote, see?? I'll just leave ya missin kid...
And pump ya full of so much Led...RV'll think your my prison bitch
You should just quit this shit, cuz my victory will be relished..
Mangle ya body beyond ugliness...it'd even make ya face jealous
Wordz a fake bitch...just a kid who try to act cool
But your gonna come up short...like the bus you took to school

v/ flash....this was a decent one...wordz you had that one line i liked but you feel off in ya verse...your punchs were weak.an personals..flash you had a more consistent verse wit some more quotes the school line was worded good so it hit hard even tho it was conry in a way..the led line i liked...you get my vote
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