yup like u just said on msn i did like that...you were quite creative..deep idead stuffed in there..if u continued like that on this it wud have ben a tighter piece...do i need to talk about flow?....i aint so familiar with commenting on poems...anyhow that flowed pretty well except for some part but wait i dont think that matters...ahhh w/e...umm whatelse..wasnt 'conscious' to be 'consciousness'?..on the first line...well this was a gd one in conclusion kep it up!

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