I like the way it started a the rhymes were basic work on that no dick sit pick clit type stuff use more complex words it looks alot better. Like instead of

Runnin from cops tuckin a gun
Tryin to put me behind bars i'd rather run

BETTER


Blue lights and sirens break the silence in the night
Police got me steppin leapin over fences with a loaded weapon

More complex see what i'm sayin?

But i like some of th stuff you said like the 3 lines lady faze me baby good concept worded better woulda been fire but its still koo.

Keep doin ya thang stay active and check out my OM click my sig where it says Drained Emotions



By the way drop two links so this stay open... Go leave feedback on two Open Mics and copy and paste the links on the bottom of your verse. Click edit paste it in.

__________________

THE TRUTH IS I'M BETTER THAN YOU